tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6009488303037074518.post8746882886688479329..comments2023-07-16T06:25:03.306-07:00Comments on Hengist - The People of the Horse: Healer, heal thyself.Jacky Grayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/08700901684207744694noreply@blogger.comBlogger2125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6009488303037074518.post-87678000785362096152014-05-02T11:10:41.897-07:002014-05-02T11:10:41.897-07:00Jennelle, you hit the nail on the head as usual. G...Jennelle, you hit the nail on the head as usual. Good prologues never try and introduce this many characters - it just confounds and bamboozles the poor reader. The actual prologue is vastly simpler now and this scene is where it should have been, in the timeline where everyone knows who the characters are. <br />Another lesson well learnt.Jacky Grayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08700901684207744694noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6009488303037074518.post-40341713059408313472014-03-13T14:13:31.922-07:002014-03-13T14:13:31.922-07:00Ro- you did a fantastic job adding voice. It went ...Ro- you did a fantastic job adding voice. It went from a little blurb that kind of keep my attention, to a read with a zinging character who is giving me the good gossip about all her friends. I get a little lost with some of the switches between characters, but that doesn't distract me from the point of the lesson. <br /><br />Fantastic voice!! Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15367431617785465840noreply@blogger.com